I’m not here to force my religion down your throat. This poem is simply what I’m feeling. I thought that most of you can at least relate to the first two stanzas.
Endless pain
No peace
Simply wishing for
Life to cease
Despair and
Darkness
Wishing for
Stillness
Peace is not
Earthly
It is other
Worldly
I wish to travel
To that place
Where I will finally
Feel grace
My final destination
Is determined
Jesus is my Lord
And I am his servant
My time here is
Coming to an end
And soon to heaven
I will ascend
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I like it. It’s simple and straight to the point. The bad news is that is bland and feel cliche. I’m not trying to sound hurtful, just offering a critique to make it better. Add some sensory details to make it better.
Here is a poem I just wrote with the intention to try to write with some sensory details to make it better.
Sometimes I wish
People could hear
The silent screaming
Which draws on endlessly
Sometimes I wish
People could see
The darkness that envelops
The lonely scared girl within
Sometimes I wish
People could understand
Why I want the screaming
And darkness to end permanently
Sometimes I wish…
If I become suicidal again this would be my poem too.
I like this poem even though I don’t feel it. I was raised Christian but now I’m nothing, I don’t believe and I don’t disbelieve, I’m just outside. So anyways I wanted to ask you if you kill yourself aren’t you telling god that he made a mistake? If you are a servant of Christ your suicide is like quitting your job? These are the questions that made me give up Christianity because – I hope this doesnt offend anyone- I think a good Christian shouldnt commit suicide and its not because of hell or damnation or anything like that, I just feel like a good christian would have faith that God wants you to live because he made you so if you decide to end your life you are giving up god which is what I guess I did. Sorry for rambling but this is the question that I can’t answer except to say I’m not a christian anymore
the forgotten, this is how I see it. Not saying it’s right but its what I believe. The way I see it is to be a true Christian, all you have to do is believe with all your heart and soul that Jesus died as a form of payment for our sins, ALL of our sins. To commit suicide is a sin, along with lying (which I do all the time), bearing false witness aka gossiping (which I know I do/did, especially in middle school), etc. etc. etc. Each one of these will earn you ticket to Hell. If you accept Jesus, God will forgive you of all your sins and will grant you with eternal life. Therefor, I am not a “good” Christian, because I sin. There is no such thing as a “good” Christian, because if we didn’t sin, then there would be no need for forgiveness, thus negating the need for a Savior. What I mean by “I am his Servant” is that I TRY to live like He lived. I TRY to love people as He has loved me. I hope this made sense in a tiny way at least.
Jesus and God know how much pain I’m in. Jesus is my lawyer basically. He will make the case for me, as He will for everybody else. He didn’t want to be in heaven forever without all of us. That’s why He gave the ultimate sacrifice. Jesus UNDERSTANDS what this world is like. I really liked one post from yesterday that said they were escaping Satan’s realm so they can go home to where Jesus rules. Satan rules the earth and Jesus and God rule heaven.
Thanks for that explanation. I think I know what you’re saying and it makes sense except I’m still screwed because in my heart I don’t accept Jesus or God no matter how hard I try. I’m hung up on the issue that most atheists use, how could an all knowing all poiwerful god create evil, suffering and Satan? People in my church always said its a test, but then I totally failed because I can’t take the suffering and it makes me mad at God for not explaining our ordeal to us. I like what you said about Jesus being your lawyer. I’m totally on board with that, if you mean maybe God is out of touch with earth so he needed to send a human form to act as a go between. and maybe Jesus goes back and tells God, that it’s really bad down there so take it easy on judgement day. I think I’m still screwed but its an interesting thought.
I don’t want to preach, but I side with the people saying that it’s a test. Despite all the bad in the world, if you accept Jesus, you will be saved. Jesus knows how fucking hard everything is down here, because He lived it. “Father forgive them, for they know not what they do.” Even then, He was kind of making the case for us because He knew the temptations, evil, and sadness that thrive here. He’s lived it, so He understands it. I understand why you would ask the question of why would He “create evil, suffering and Satan?” The only thing is that He didn’t create those things. He let them be, though. I still have a lot of questions but, for me, I go back to that truth (in my eyes) that I will have eternal life. One thing really stuck with me from the funeral of my friend in 2015. The dad said, “I don’t think God made the crash happen, but I believe He LET it happen” In my opinion, He let it happen because He knew that she would come to heaven and be safe because she was a believer. He would have stopped it maybe if He thought that if He saved her, she would change her mind and believe. The end got a little confusing, but I hope the gist of it makes sense.