Welp here is my poem tonight (I want to share it for some reason, is longer than normal) It’s sort of two poems though that kind of fit together in a way. One of them I sort of wrote based on some things that are commonly said to me (had an experience with them today actually) and the other is I guess a response? Not a great response, nor really from me, more just wrote it from the perspective of the imaginary target of the first one…. Not sure is confusing I just wrote these took about 30 minutes which is pre long really -_-
**start**
Hey there, you fucking freak
Come near me, and I’ll make you squeak
When my fist connects with your cheek
Breaking your face the blood will leak
I hate all you fucking faggots
Go eat shit with the other maggots
Don’t let me see you again
As next time I won’t just complain
I’ll cause you pain you won’t forget
I’ll beat you down make you repent
For your sins and your actions
And your sickly attractions
Cut your hair it’s way too long
And throw out all your bras and thongs
Go and beg for forgiveness
And stop spreading your sickness
“I’m so weak and insecure”
“I’m blinded by my minister “
When you speak that’s all I hear
I’m looking around for your puppeteer
Whose hand is up this dummy’s ass?
Whoever it is they have no class
You best watch out I do have bite
I’ll stop you dead like a traffic light
You are screaming “god hates fags”
Yet you light up and take some drags
I doubt that you got that joke
Cus you are a stupid bloke
You are boring and standard
You yell at me and it’s absurd
How easily you are angered
You’re the reason I’m shattered
It wasn’t you in particular
But it was another contributor
With their insults and their stabs
But now all I hear is senseless blabs
**end**
So I would like to know how much they suck. What could I do better?
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welp I posted this, then deleted it, and now I’m deciding to post it again…. I need to start being more willing to show people the shitty things that I make, I know they are less shit than a lot of other things that people show to others IRL so I should just do it…. I guess I will force myself to not check SP for several hours just so I can’t delete this again.
Lots of anger and hurt and pain. I’ve been there. I’ve hated like this. It never does any good to hate this deeply, but the hate has to come out or be strangled, choked by it. Then feel the light go out of your own life. Hang on…keep looking up towards that opening.
I’m not actually sure what emotions of mine this was meant to express…. I’m not really very in touch with my emotions….
No kidding? Sounds like you were writing and touching something within, but..you would know. Anyway…glad you didn’t delete it. It’s good.
Yeah I know it expressed emotions of mine, however I have no idea which ones…. I am not really good at knowing how I feel. 🙁
And it does annoy me, as I often don’t feel like I feel pain…. which is sort of why I kind of want bad things to happen to me.
^_^ but sorry for possibly arguing with you, I’m trying to stop that behavior…. apparently that’s what actually was annoying my friend, he hates me because of it.
i love hearing your shitty poems first thing in the morning!!!! it’s good you want to post your works, try not to be so angry. i got to go to work.
Have fun at work ^_^ I hope it goes well.
I shall try to post a happy little poem sometime for you Mr. Rocketman
hello little buddy, the reason i say not so angry is because it would make you feel better to write something funny, you are what you think about! i liked your ball busting post!! i’m sure you really weren’t that serious, I HOPE NOT!!! 🙂 OUCH!!
The masturbation posts were all serious…. At least the post part, some of the things I’ve said in the comments I was joking around a bit…. Like the car battery thing I don’ feel like I would do
Im glad you shared and I hope you leave it up.
I shall keep it up…. no point taking it down anymore after so many have clearly seen it already :/
I enjoyed your poem with a chuckle. I really like how there are profanities in particular. It brings out character, keep it up. ?
ya chuckles are good 😀 And it was a profane day for me :3