This story is about the girl who learned to live alone.
She used to sit alone in her classroom. She used to walk alone because nobody likes talking to her. She used to be alone all the time. She failed in almost everything in her life. She was tired of the insults and the pain she had inside. People used to laugh at her all the time, make fun of her, follow her to insult her more and more.
She was tired of the way she chooses to fight with her pain. She used to cry all night. She used to stair the walls all the time and remember her pain and the shit she had in her life.
She started thinking she is not good enough for anyone. She was so tired of trying and she started loosing interest in almost everything. It was all too much for her and she wasn’t able to bear her pain anymore So she finally decided to end her life and end all this pain to get peace, to free herself from the worries, insults and unbearable pain she has.
It was a dark night and she was sitting at the bank of the river. She decided to jump in the river and end this life but before doing that she thought of remembering everything she had. She closed her eyes and started remembering all those people who have hurt her, insults she suffered, all the mistrust and the unbearable pain she has and suddenly she felt like everyone is standing around her and insulting her again, making fun her, laughing at her and it was so bad . . She suddenly opened her eyes and what she realized is she is all alone at the bank of the river, no one is following her to insult her right there right now, no one is laughing at her, no one is there to give her pain and break her trust.
And She realized if she will always keep in her mind that she is alone in this world then there will be no one to hurt her, no one to giver her pain, no one to break the trust and promises again and she will not have to cry all night for her pain. She realized that she has to learn to live alone in this world because the only person who can help her is she herself. Only she can help herself and pick herself up whenever she falls down.
On that night she hugged herself tight and promised herself that she will never leave herself ans she will fight alone with whole world because she does not have to worry about the pain anymore as she is learning to live alone all on her own.
i have written this story please tell me the bad things in my writing
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what do you mean, “you people?”
i meant the member of this community
A little more white space would make it easier to read in the web environment.
Starting a sentence with ‘And’ and the like can through off a reader…
I think you show promise and hope you continue to work on your craft.
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thanks a lot for telling me the truth
i ll try to follow your suggestions and i ll keep working hard
im waiting for some mord suggestions and critics as well
The concept is good, there is an arc. 🙂 Some things to work on are tense changes and description. These will come with time, practice, and editing. Keep working at your craft!
The ad thing? Ok, here it is.. (1) Nothing! and (2) I agree with you actually. We can’t expect anyone to help us when we’re there for ourselves really. Killing yourself means you also can’t stick up for yourself anymore either. Why not live with yourself every day, knowing that if other people dislike who you are, yoou can like you! I know that’ss really really hard but it’s achievablee. Just tell yourself that you’ll survive because your life doesn’t depend on others really. It depends on you. You don’t really have to hate others becuse they hate you. It’ss not like you have to prove yourself to everyone, but what I’m saying is that if you prove just to you that you’re worth living for, forget everyone else, then how can other people affect you except for what you allow to get to you? It’s fucking hard to work that out, but one you do life starts to get easier knowing that you no longer need anything from anyone to make you feel good. I suppose this won’t work for everyone. It does for me. Mind you I’m pretty selfish and have like only two friends and only some family. Good luck and keep writing!
thank you and i ll try to work on my tense and grammar i hope i ll be able to write some good stories pretty soon 🙂
@MichelleJ yeah you are right and that’s what i tried to convey in my story and its not being selfish its just like supporting ourselves because if you are not going to help yourself then who will do. .no one
only you can expect the best from yourself and we should not be harsh with ourselves we should understand that its not always to get what we want but disappointments will only break us if we let them do so
you should accept the fact you are alone and only you can do the best for yourself