“Take a leap of faith” you said
“and leave this foreign place instead
where demons breathe and dreamers die
and pain and hatred coincide”
“and then what happens?” I replied
I couldn’t even if I tried”
You took my hand and said to me
“trust me, let’s just run and flee”
we race through chasms deep and wide
where some have lived and others died
through broken lands of dust we pass
as we walk on roads of shattered glass
just you and me against the world
where hopes and dreams begin to blur
we run for days, for years and more
and witness all from birth and war
we know our destination though
but which paths are we supposed to go?
“you’re waiting for a train” you said
“one that picks up those who fled
but it doesn’t matter where it stops
because together we will always walk.”
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HavenΓΒ΄t I read this before somewhere, have you published this somewhere or did you write this? Seems so familiar…
If a word-pair has strong rhyming in it, the progression tends to be predictable (not in a bad way – you can see what word will rhyme with the first word in a pair and know what it’ll be prior to reading it). The best poets can trigger a sense of deja vu out of thin air, leaving their readers bewildered. Maybe that’s what happened here. Or perhaps that’s what happened, and she’s also published this somewhere, and you’ve read it, causing a triple deja vu effect.
I have no idea what happenened but it hit me. Could of course be some dejavu effect. Without the train being in that poem it had me envision the vast lands in Lord of rings-movie, and how this poem could tell a little tale from that environment.
LoTR-fan here..
yeah I wrote this, not too long ago either ha
Job well done, I suppose it must have reminded me of something similar. You have a talent for this stuff…
dang, thank you, that means a lot π
Positive feedback is always earned so.. π
I’m all emotionally flat andrambly today, lol. Don’t mind me, I didn’t get much sleep last night so my brain isn’t running at more than 60% . I am become a robot. Hooray.
@stendarr: I liked the poem as well – dunno if that came across in my last comment, but you have some solid rhymes in there and it has a good flow to it. π