I have my soul sealed in a tomb
The whole me concealed by gloom
A night stroll in a minefield I’ll assume
Is a whole lot more pleasant than now
I have no control and it’s apparent that I’ll disallow
Any attempt to offer me aid
That just tempts me to fade
Away faster
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me now: I was playing with a thing, and eventually it just went this way, and I’m uncertain how to feel about it…. So this is a decent way to hopefully maybe get some feedback, I’m not sure if it feels like it ends too abruptly or not, or if I should maybe try to unify it more, I have no idea what happened with it eventually it just did this thing that it did, I had originally very different plans for its structure. Opps xD
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Yeah, I think it ends too abruptly. Maybe you could continue it where it left off.
Away faster, it leads me astray to death’s master, and breeds an array of pests from my laughter, and it feeds on your useless charade of chatter. I’ll make you cease your clueless parade of “you matter”. So kill the beast or get a berate of “you stupid bastard”. Then you’ll be sure to pick the former instead of the latter.
Sorry, your writing made me want to be creative.
Noes, don’t apologize I’m happy that something I wrote made you want to be creative.
also yes yes it does need more you are right xD (But I never finish things)
also that is very nice and does do the thing.
very creative
^_^