Welp this one doesn’t follow a common theme or anything, no sense can be made from this…. Guess still better to have done something, it probably generates ideas for when (if) I want to make something decent and that has meaning and such…. Yeah I’ll go with that…. However I commonly just like to throw shit at the page until something decides to stay -_-
I decided on the scenic route
Because the world’s mean without
Provocation or hesitation
Altercation, decapitation
Seems to be commonplace
Kill those lacking a common face
That seems colder than deep space
Now I wait for Death’s embrace
Oh man, I’m a basket case
But I’ll die on my birthday
I’m crazy what can I say?
I can’t live with these standards
Will not turn bone to lanyards
I’m trapped, left home alone
Cutting my skin, just been shown
Such great violence, screams of pain
Watched in silence, it seems insane
That we will do that to others
Then go home and hug our mothers
15 comments
Excellent! 🙂
You’ve improved!
and now am baking potatoes -_-
Ok?
I really like the line “kill those lacking a common face”.
It makes me think about how society suppresses individual experience and individuality!
That’s a great line!
I was probably going for something like that with that…. I really can’t think what else I would have been going for with it -_-
Wow, there’s a lot of insight in your poem ! I like it !
Can i just say that the difference between your first and most recent piece is night and day..
Im amazed and extremely impressed…How someone can improve so much in less than a week is beyond me..
You are truly talented and Im a wee bit jealous..
The best one yet I actually read it twice “kill those lacking common face” I so needed this thanks for sticking to the routine
Thats not to say that yr first was pretty shit because yr most recent is amazing because essentially that is what Ive bloody written but please know that is not what i meant..
Ugg.. forgive me..
Sorry I don’t mean to get involved but I’d like to make an opinion and that is I think your first reply was very sweet 🙂
it made me chuckle that you are so worried that I would have interpreted it like that ^_^ don’t worry I didn’t 😀 -hugs-
Thanks sadlife.. Tis the mind that runs amok thinking and hoping that my words arent taken the wrong way..
Really good 🙂