Hi. I’m fairly new here but it seems like a good place to share my writing. I don’t know if anyone else will appreciate it but I just want to put it out there…
I wrote this last night. It’s meant to be a song but I suck at putting things to music, so it’s just lyrics. Feel free to make up your own tune if your musical. I sing…
Anyways, feel free to give me feedback. I’ve never shown my stuff to anyone before because I’m pretty good at pretending to be alright and I don’t want to ruin all that hard work. Here it is:
Just because I am leaving
Doesn’t mean there aren’t things I won’t miss
These moments I am treasuring
Until my blissful finish
The smell of spice in the morning
Chai tea barely finished boiling
Driving slowly on the back roads
For once, completely in control
Walking into the only place I feel at peace
Smiling into familiar faces with ease
Listening to you laugh
Or watching you do
What you love to do
Just because I am leaving
Doesn’t mean there aren’t things I won’t miss
These moments I am treasuring
Until my blissful finish
Graceful words swimming through my mind
The pages of a book are kind
Music rising up in my bones
Becoming the unfettered tones
Heart soaring with my voice on the angelic notes
The weight seems to fade on this illusive boat
Going is bittersweet
But I know my pain
Driving me insane
Just because I am leaving
Doesn’t mean there aren’t things I won’t miss
These moments I am treasuring
Until my blissful finish
Everyone will live
Everyone will love
And I will look down
From so far above
I wish you all joy
I wish you all mirth
That felicity
I haven’t felt since birth
Just because I am leaving
Doesn’t mean there aren’t things I won’t miss
These moments I am treasuring
Until my blissful finish
I only await that blissful finish
3 comments
hi, subtle_bloodstains… I think it’s great that you’re writing your own music. Although there is no tune yet, you never know where your creations can take you. Nice writing…
I paused at this line before continuing: “For once, completely in control”
I’m often in the midst of a quest to get some element of control… particularly when the events are spiraling out of control at their very worst.
I don’t know much about your situation… I don’t want you to get to a point where your lyrics come true and you’re looking down. If there are things on your mind, feel free to share. Many of us will listen… and do our best to help and support.
this is terribly beautiful. you are an amazing writer. i’m sorry things are so hard. I feel it too,we all do,I can really feel your sadness when i read this. please don’t give up. you have a real talent. i think you should share it with others.
distant.road: Thank you for your inspiring message. Although I’m not sure I can save myself at this point, I really appreciate anyone listening.
ellachristina: Thank you! Maybe I will post some of my other stuff in time…